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Silence is golden, no sounds are in sight,
Nothing is heard that sheds any light;
Movement turns dark, then quiet comes near,
Listen to stillness and watch dreams appear.
A children's bedtime? poem ... for more than just children
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Given 2017-04-17
Silence by ForgeAus is short and sweet with funny contradictions. ( Suggested by BATTLEFAIRIES and Featured by doughboycafe )
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Dronkey64 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Student Artist
Boy, i wish I could come up with things THAt true... :/ great job! :)
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KAYZ0 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
Damn
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rex-raxon Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Student Digital Artist
Really great poem. Congratulations to the DD and a good start to the new week.Clap Clap Clap
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Pineapplecoker Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely Congrats
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C1nderellaMan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Nice... catchy and dreamy. :clap: Congrats!
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD
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SummerDreams-Art Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Student Digital Artist
It's such a lovely piece of poetry, beautiful imagery and congrats on the DD.:clap:
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What a great little poem. I'm always a sucker for rhymes and I think it's been too easy to take the topic of 'silence' and turn it into something rather ominous rather that something peaceful. Although this did start off sounding slightly dark, until you mentioned dreams and then it lightened it up considerably so I like that changing wave of emotion you managed to provoke.
Congratulations on the DD
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ForgeAus Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
I think it depends on your interpretation for how it seems at various times, you may need to read it again, but I can certainly see how one could see it as sinister until you reach the last line... That was completely unintentional and an interesting note... 
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yep
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BATTLEFAIRIES Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2017
My, this is very nice. I love little playful things like these; especially with the little plays on words there: the sounds that aren't in sight etc. A gem, truly.
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ScytheShadow Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2006
thats really beautiful ^.^

love the imagery
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ForgeAus Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2006  Hobbyist Artist
Hey :) thanx for the comments, I really like this one, it was my first good poem and probably because of that it means alot to me...
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ScytheShadow Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2006
no prob ^.^
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